I strived to collect
the shattered
pieces of your
broken
mirror
The one
you bought
to catch a glimpse
of your ailing
soul
I’d slowly arrange
those
crystal pieces
into a living
puzzle
My hands
got scarred,
my heart, all aching—
fearing
one high toll
My mind
all floundered,
just picking pieces
off the cold
ceramics
My feet all naked,
as I kept walking
on that
unswept
floor
*
You yearned
to collect the
shattered pieces
of your broken
mirror
The one
You bought
to catch a glimpse
of your unmasked
whole
Yet your aid,
guarded,
while it was wanted,
you just kept all
secret,
For hell,
lightened,
may have
one day granted
your long-wished
parole
Forever silenced,
while it was wanted,
it remained a secret,
a living puzzle
a shattered mirror—
a sight
so
bold
*
I’d try to arrange
those
crystal pieces
into a living
puzzle
The one that
would once
brighten such
a dim-lit
gaol
Yet my aid,
guarded,
while it was needed,
you just kept all
secret,
Those empty promises
words void
of meaning—
a death
foretold
Yes—it was wanted,
those shattered
pieces,
a living
puzzle,
Which you kept
guarded,
forever silenced,
an ailing
soul
There is so much to admire in this piece VB. I love how you weave words over and over, but always in a different way. Your use of rhyme add a lot to as well (foretold/soul). I always find myself reading your poems over a number of times, each time, picking up on something new. “Those empty promises/words void /of meaning—”… Wow. Really an outstanding piece of artistic expression. In another life, I would wish to write like you do 💜
WOOOOW B., thanks for such a wonderful comment, you are making me blush now (for real ☺️☺️). I feel extremely humbled that such a great writer as yourself would write this feedback. You know the admiration is mutual 💜
oh Linda, Let me tell you I LOVE your comment, so happy you found Broken Mirror so touching and heartfelt. It was definitely a very personal and emotional poem for me to write. I am really sorry for the delay getting back to this comment, unfortunately it ended up in my WP spam folder and I haven’t been checking WordPress too actively for the last few months 🙁 Thanks so much for visiting and leaving this beautiful comment for me, really looking forward to reading more of your poetry 🌟❤️
There is so much to admire in this piece VB. I love how you weave words over and over, but always in a different way. Your use of rhyme add a lot to as well (foretold/soul). I always find myself reading your poems over a number of times, each time, picking up on something new. “Those empty promises/words void /of meaning—”… Wow. Really an outstanding piece of artistic expression. In another life, I would wish to write like you do 💜
WOOOOW B., thanks for such a wonderful comment, you are making me blush now (for real ☺️☺️). I feel extremely humbled that such a great writer as yourself would write this feedback. You know the admiration is mutual 💜
Whoa!!! I love this, the two people collecting pieces of mirrors. It could make for a great novel or movie. Fantastic approach!
Thanks so much Benjamin, really cool you liked it! pleasure to have you around 🙂
You’re welcome!!!
🙂
You’re welcome! 🙂
Welcome! Keep writing!
Absolutely loved this one! I loved the structure and the rhyming scheme, such smooth mix of emotions and words. I’m going to save this.
Many many many thanks!!! I am so happy you enjoyed reading it 🙂 It was definitely a very emotional piece for me to write.
You’re welcome 😊
😊
Beautiful metaphors that touch visuals with the heart. Than you for this 💕🕊💕
oh Linda, Let me tell you I LOVE your comment, so happy you found Broken Mirror so touching and heartfelt. It was definitely a very personal and emotional poem for me to write. I am really sorry for the delay getting back to this comment, unfortunately it ended up in my WP spam folder and I haven’t been checking WordPress too actively for the last few months 🙁 Thanks so much for visiting and leaving this beautiful comment for me, really looking forward to reading more of your poetry 🌟❤️